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"that color is ugly."
she would say
when I would dip my
pens and paint brushes
in a glass dish of guacamole.
"food is beautiful."
I stroke the avocado on the walls,
I let it live
I let it breathe
I let it absorb the colors,
I let it eat.
"that color is ugly."
she'll say again,
in her plaid bra
and bronze skin
and I'll hold back a sigh.
I dip the tip of the brush
into the heart of the
liquid emerald.
I spread the avocado tears
across my chest,
an equilateral line of green life.
my heart.
I spread it across her collar bones,
a vertical line of organic structure.
her soul.
"that color is ugly."
she'll say, taking her clothes off.
I'll hold back the tears.
"that color is you."
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GoldenGeminian Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's been a while since I've stumbled upon a metaphor that felt so purely original. I love this!
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TheStoyTeller Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I really do appreciate the support, it means the most!
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wdnest Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Professional Writer
[link] Featured here
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TheStoyTeller Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
sick dude! Thanks sooo much! Awesome feature page.
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Natural--20 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
It's very... metaphysical
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TheStoyTeller Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
haha I don't know what that means, but thank you. :)
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fantasticEverything Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh my god, i just sat back with utter satisfaction after the last line hit me
perfectly written!!! i dont know how to phrase my appreciation, the metaphor is so incredibly original wow
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TheStoyTeller Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha I got your appreciation perfectly well. Thanks so much for the support and for your kind words. I'm very joyed that you liked it! Thanks again for the support.
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DarkLondonDreams Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It flowed very well. It's beautiful :)
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TheStoyTeller Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much for reading and taking the time to comment. :)
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