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She looked around with
her head held high
Naive optimism tattooed
on her slick neck
like a noose,
wet with perspiration
and desire.
She wears wonder
like the crown of
a dead queen
and glory sharpens her eyes
as she asks herself
if a living body still floats
though the mind is dead.

And she pranced down
the wooden path
to eternity
like a lioness
walking through fire
where jeers and judgements
raged around her like
a boisterous red sea.

Her lips are toxic,
and the words fall
from her mouth
like she was spitting
up oil,
and her skin froze
and turned blue
because her body
had realized before
she did that
she had finally died.

And I screamed,
because I was so damn
terrified to see
someone willingly
walk to the edge of the sea
but when it was over
I was ready.
It was my turn.

I close my eyes,
and think about
the words you said
"I'm ready to be a
suicide,
girl."

The jeers and the judgement
turn into jagged edged questions
asking me
if I have any
last words.

I think about
all of the words
I would have saved and said
if God had told me
years ago
that I only had
a million more breaths to give.
My heart sinks as I fall off of
the egde and whisper
my last words;
"I'm ready to love a
suicide
girl."

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Its about walking the plank. Inspired by Eyes Wide Open by Gotye.

what is your reaction to the piece?
what are your overall thoughts on the meaning?
was the word choice captivating or the opposite?

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!LionSchool Dec 2, 2012  Professional
I really love how immersive this feels... very... what's the word... luscious, sensory-wise. You do that really well. Good stuff sir.
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~TheStoyTeller Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much. I really appreciate that.
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