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They ate rocks.
What does that mean?
It means they were trying to get back to the Earth
without dying.
They wanted to return to the soil
without giving up their precious immortality.

These people
The Graceful
these lonely human beings
were willing to grind their very bone into dust
they were willing to digest
the geometric organs
the geographic inards of Gaia herself
if it meant
that they could live
forever.

They ate rocks
and it didn't matter if they couldn't breathe
if they couldn't bleed red.
It didn't even matter
if they couldn't love.
these lonely human beings
were willing to bury their hearts in the Earth
if it meant they could live
forever.
did the piece flow well?
what are your thoughts on the theme?
leave a comment to let me know you liked it. :)
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nochs Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wow! interesting concept, what inspired it?
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TheStoyTeller Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.

I was at a bonfire and a few guys had dared one of my friends to eat some of the charred wood. Under normal circumstances, my friend would have never even thought about such a thing but here he had a chance to be cool, to have friends, to be somewhat immortalized by the moment. Or at least thats the way I saw it. I thought about it for a really long while, and line by line, week by week, this poem was formed. haha

hope this helps give you some insight! (:
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Istraello Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013
I love the flow and the story you create; if it's okay to point out, 'innards' has two /n/s in it instead of one (I don't know if that will matter to you, though).

This is just all-around a really great piece. Thanks for sharing with us!
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TheStoyTeller Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much, I really appreciate it. and thanks for pointing that out! I'll fix it when I get the chance. You're awesome!
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Istraello Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013
No problem; glad to help! ^_^
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haannaah-the-cupcake Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013
i looove this!
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TheStoyTeller Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
haha thank you for reading! I'm glad you liked it! :)
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haannaah-the-cupcake Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013
you're welcome :D
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Wyhberry Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
You ever thought of making this into a short story? I'd love to read it if you did! :)
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TheStoyTeller Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I haven't thought of that actually. Not sure how I'd aproach it if I did, but it would be interesting. Thanks for reading!
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